Reflection Of Balloon Car Race

We "Tried" to win the race. Me, Bjorn and Rilen made our car and this is it.

This is my writing sample.

This is my writing about my first yellowfin.

My main focus was to not put to many then and ands in the writing 

My first Yellowfin Tuna

As I was winding the fish in I was struggling so my dad gave me an assist. So I did´t lose it and then  I got back towards the fish. My Dad was saying don't let the line go slack keep it tight one time the line went slack us thinking the fish was gone but then the skipper drove us further forward to see if it was still there. Here we go again. The fish started the fight again. I was fighting my hardest in the fight that went on for about another ten minutes. Then my Dad said color that's the sign of he sees the fish so when he leans over the side that means to start slowly walking back so he can gaf the fish.Yay we landed my first yellowfin tuna. My dad said a quick photo.

So we got the tuna bag and then it went in the tuna bag. We have to put ice on it to make sure it doesn't lose any weight, making sure it's nice and heavy so we headed back to weigh it. Turns out I got the heaviest yellowfin tuna for the Tatapouri Fishing Club.

By Kyle.

My main goal for my writing next term is sentence structure.